Talk to ME!

[phoenix_arose]

I understood the moment you first
Captured my gaze, the way you were moving
With reckless abandon, like a wild thing
That makes the predators hunger and thirst
And start to stalk your body with the worst
Possible intentions. Waiting to bring
You to your knees, mouth on your neck, breathing
Hot moist shivers that will drive you to burst.
They might not know that you are in control,
That your pose as their prey is illusion.
A snare as elaborate as your eye.
And though I have seen you playing this role
I am still spinning in stark confusion.
I know the 'how', won't you please show me why?

So please leave a coment and tell me what you think of it BTW it was not written by me -s o my feeling wil not be hurt if you hate it

Comments

[lancehunter.livejournal.com]

Rhythmic, but presumptuous. I'd give it a 6/10. ;)

What do you think of it?

[aronal.livejournal.com]

I was going to say that's one of the best you've written (that I've read), but it's not by you, oh well.